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Bravely Default: Fanfic: Smooth Talker
Title: Smooth Talker
Fandom: Bravely Default: Where the Fairy Flies
Characters: Alternis Dim, Lee family
Rating: PG/SFW
Length: 484 words
Content Notes: Spoilers for chapter 4's end!
Summary: Women and men have different ways of talking, and Alternis grew up in a country of women. Adjusting to Eternia comes with a small hitch.
Women and men have different ways of talking, at least in Eternia. This makes the new arrival from Florem stick out like a sore thumb: he is a young man grown in a country of women, and as much as he takes great offense when his manhood is called into doubt, there's no denying that his manner of speaking makes him sound more like the women he learned to speak from. Mahzer is no linguist, so she's not quite able to put her finger on all that makes his words stand out as different from the men's--the higher intonation is obvious enough, but there's more, little things beyond that. The Florem flourish sounds different in a boy's voice, but it's definitely present. When he is patient and in a good mood, which is usually when he is found with little Edea, the little questions stand out: "Right?", "You follow?", always making sure the younger child is keeping up with him when she's not tearing along her own line of thought. It's perhaps a bit strange to hear a young man talk in such a way, but his voice is clear and sweet enough to make it rather becoming.
But he is a young man entering Eternia's army, and Mahzer knows all too well how certain officers, Crowe and Heinkel in particular, feel about women and femininity. Their attitudes infect the ranks and it's all too often that Alternis is in a sour and recalcitrant mood, mocked when he speaks for how he does and mocked when he bites his tongue, and Braev is soon sighing that the only solution the boy seems to have found is to speak with his fists--which is, at least, a step up from his blade, but still not good for keeping order in the ranks. It's easier for one to change than a multitude, so it's no surprise that after some weeks Alternis is deliberately pitching his voice deeper and rougher, and the rolling tones of his motherland begin to vanish. It's a somewhat regrettable change, but as the weeks turn into months and months turn into years, it's all but forgotten by the Lee family. Braev, Mahzer and Edea have all grown used to the clipped tones Alternis has come to use and can hardly imagine him speaking any other way. The memory of how Alternis was when he first arrived into their lives only comes to Mahzer's mind when she is face to face with Edea and her daughter's new friends. She asks them to take care of her daughter and one young man assures her, with a bow even, that he would never do anything but. While his words alone would make her happy, his voice broadens her smile further. He's only got a hint of it, but he has it, that novel Florem flourish. It goes perfectly with his charming manner.
Fandom: Bravely Default: Where the Fairy Flies
Characters: Alternis Dim, Lee family
Rating: PG/SFW
Length: 484 words
Content Notes: Spoilers for chapter 4's end!
Summary: Women and men have different ways of talking, and Alternis grew up in a country of women. Adjusting to Eternia comes with a small hitch.
Women and men have different ways of talking, at least in Eternia. This makes the new arrival from Florem stick out like a sore thumb: he is a young man grown in a country of women, and as much as he takes great offense when his manhood is called into doubt, there's no denying that his manner of speaking makes him sound more like the women he learned to speak from. Mahzer is no linguist, so she's not quite able to put her finger on all that makes his words stand out as different from the men's--the higher intonation is obvious enough, but there's more, little things beyond that. The Florem flourish sounds different in a boy's voice, but it's definitely present. When he is patient and in a good mood, which is usually when he is found with little Edea, the little questions stand out: "Right?", "You follow?", always making sure the younger child is keeping up with him when she's not tearing along her own line of thought. It's perhaps a bit strange to hear a young man talk in such a way, but his voice is clear and sweet enough to make it rather becoming.
But he is a young man entering Eternia's army, and Mahzer knows all too well how certain officers, Crowe and Heinkel in particular, feel about women and femininity. Their attitudes infect the ranks and it's all too often that Alternis is in a sour and recalcitrant mood, mocked when he speaks for how he does and mocked when he bites his tongue, and Braev is soon sighing that the only solution the boy seems to have found is to speak with his fists--which is, at least, a step up from his blade, but still not good for keeping order in the ranks. It's easier for one to change than a multitude, so it's no surprise that after some weeks Alternis is deliberately pitching his voice deeper and rougher, and the rolling tones of his motherland begin to vanish. It's a somewhat regrettable change, but as the weeks turn into months and months turn into years, it's all but forgotten by the Lee family. Braev, Mahzer and Edea have all grown used to the clipped tones Alternis has come to use and can hardly imagine him speaking any other way. The memory of how Alternis was when he first arrived into their lives only comes to Mahzer's mind when she is face to face with Edea and her daughter's new friends. She asks them to take care of her daughter and one young man assures her, with a bow even, that he would never do anything but. While his words alone would make her happy, his voice broadens her smile further. He's only got a hint of it, but he has it, that novel Florem flourish. It goes perfectly with his charming manner.
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Mahzer and Braev actually do recognize him without being told in subsequent worlds (third and fourth iirc) though, so they must know his face at least a bit, but likely events in the first world keep them from ever making the jump to placing him as Alternis (while people pre-spoiler have liked theorizing that Ringabel slips away every night to act as Alternis, the game actually treats distance as a thing not collapsible into two/three hours-- Mahzer and Braev are being given regular updates by Alternis which means his location itself is regularly known, so even if they see a young man who somehow reminds them of him, they're not going to think "ALTERNIS???" because they know what Alternis has been up to, there's no way he could be the fourth member of Edea's group). Edea was younger when his face was more frequently seen so she simply doesn't remember well enough, and Ringabel acts so differently that that's a huge mislead in itself. ...Honestly the most glaring plothole I think actually stands from Alternis' infiltration of Caldisla under Heinkel's suggestion, as we're outright told that Heinkel deliberately got Alternis drunk to make him more amenable to the idea. They were drinking and eating, he probably wasn't wearing the helmet then! Then Heinkel encounters Ringabel backing up Edea turning traitor--and he KNOWS Alternis would be liable to protect Edea, that's specifically what he used to appeal to Alternis for his idea. Add in the little note that Heinkel has always had some interest in Alternis and seemed to find him a promising young knight and he really should have both recognized Ringabel (having recently seen his face) and had some sort of reaction, even if it was just utter bafflement because he finds it hard to believe Alternis himself has turned traitor. There's nothing in that scene. \o_O/
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Ringabel reverting to his original accent and behaviors is a very attractive theory, and in light of what there is to work with having Alternis never remove the armor in public seems the most workable solution (making me think of Judge Dredd...). Oh; could the Dark Knight asterisk be some kind of family heirloom that he wound up with? I like the idea he already had it which helps with preventing him being recognised. And... I'm never quite sure, but I do wonder if there are really only one copy of each asterisk in the world (quite likely since Yulyana is the only one capable of making them - still wishing that was gone into a little more).
Ah, true Braev and Mahzer recognize him regardless later on. I think I ran into some people theorizing that Alternis and Ringabel were the same person at the same time just yesterday. Its kind of an interesting theory, but yeah invalidated by the game and distances (it did impress me when there was a later party chat about how long they were sailing on the Eschalot)..
Ah - I think I need to read D's journal more thoroughly as I didn't know about that little bit about the infiltration. Yeah that whole note just causes no end of problems (though now I have silly visions of Alternis drinking via a really long straw that disappears into his helmet...). Dammit writers! Its as if Alternis/Ringabel was a late on decision and they didn't correct for it in the preceding story, or at the very best the D's journal entry was written really early and left unchanged.
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Given that Alternis was abandoned by his mother I never really thought his asterisk would be an heirloom (kind of "if she cares enough about him to give him something so rare, why is she abandoning him in the first place?" There ARE possible explanations, it's just not what first jumps to mind). I've kind of been imagining the Dark Knight asterisk as something of a legend in the slums of Florem, passed around from user to user by theft, murder, betrayal... lovely things like that, and Alternis would have either gotten it from the last person because they were already dying/dead, or it'd be much Agnes and Tiz getting the white mage/monk actually: he was attacked by the asterisk-holder and just narrowly managed to kill them with a bit of wits, instinct and a ton of luck.
Ah, was the Eschalot chat the one where Ringabel had scolded Agnes for not eating what Tiz caught when they ran out of other provisions? I adored that one.
The whole story of why Dim was in Caldisla is way more apparent in the full journal, but yeah, it's an interesting read! If a tiny bit frustrating...
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Ah; along with not having read D's journal very thoroughly, I'd forgotten about the abandonment, so yeah the heirloom doesn't make much sense. The legend of the slums one is interesting, I think in keeping with the game's mechanics I like the idea that he was attacked by the asterisk holder and managed to defeat them through wits, instinct and luck.
Yes! That's the chat in question.
I will read the journal more thoroughly; been skimming through the event viewer for detail for some fic ideas for the new prompt (it kind of feels tailor-made for Bravely Default)...
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And "Revision" does sound like it has possibilities with the Groundhog's Day loop--that, or perhaps tidying up a nagging plothole >_> haha.
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